“I dreamed you were carried away on a crest of a wave…

…baby don’t go away, come here.”- Bright Eyes “Walk Away”

Great song, you all should probably give it a listen.

So in one of my classes, Creative Writing, we are studying the different forms and structures of poetry. This week we did sonnets. Everyone was required to write a poem to be turned in, but one lucky soul had to sign up to read theirs aloud and have it put on the chopping block and have it criticized by the members of the class. Hmmm. Well, I think that I will submit the poems that I write on this little blog, and have you lovely people tell me what you think. Honestly. I mean, the more honest you are, the better my grade will be. No pressure though. I would just appreciate any and all thoughts about them. Thanks!

Rules of Sonnet-ing.

14 lines, iambic pentameter, ababcdcdefefgg rhyming scheme, start with problem-find resolution in the last couplet. Okay, keep those rules in mind; they obviously influenced some word choices. Here goes…

Truth

All I hear from the song is Life Ain’t Chess

which is something I know nothing about.

My eyes hurt from the loud print on her dress

and on and on she goes about her doubts.

My mind will float and drift away from here

only to be brought back with a long pause

and eyes that beg me to belittle her fear.

No, sister, I can’t – I am not the cause.

Two pairs of glasses for the man who reads

next to us. Why Would He Act This Way, sigh.

My answer could take her doubt from a seed

to a huge oak. Think. Tell her the end’s nigh?

Song change: it is He Stopped Loving Her Today.

Well, I think to myself, that is one way.

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